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She wraps herself in somber lies
Step out of the rain, don't drown my dear.
Consumed by grief and doubt, she cries
She has but nothing left to fear.

She squanders love as it comes her way
Step into the light, don't hide my dear.
With a wistful plea, she begs him to stay
But does her frail heart prove sincere?

She regrets letting him slip though her fingers
Step out of the cold, don't shiver my dear.
On the tip of her tongue, her lost love lingers
The sorrow foretold that they wouldn't cohere.

Streams of scarlet run down her shoulder
Step into the darkness, don't wither my dear.
All she needs is for someone to hold her
Someone to listen as she sheds a tear.

Silence becomes her, as still as the night
Step into the warmth, don't freeze my dear.
To take that plunge off a bridge, she might
Only to bring forth the end that is near.

She carries on her tenuous life
Step away from it all, don't weep my dear.
Cutting her deep like the sharpest knife
This state of apprehension won't disappear.

Tracing the marks of despair on her skin
She stares at her reflection and sighs.
When will the comfort she yearns for begin?
As it falls apart under grimmest of skies.

She paints a smile to fool and deceive
Then loses her will as she falls to the floor
Her listless mindset cannot perceive
As she utters the words "no more, no more".

Her beauty shows
Yet sadness grows.
As she remains
A wilted rose.
If you don't give a rose enough love it dies, also if you give a
rose too much love it dies.
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lol. You have a seeming fascination with weak-willed women.  Excellent poetry
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kiracrazy9999 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love it it relates so much to evryday life evyr love that crosses n ends up broken we do wilt away in my opinion
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner May 2, 2012
Lovely poem.
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HeartofPoetry Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012
Beautiful, the ending is marvelous too
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very lovely; I really like the repetition of 'my dear', and the rhyme scheme does wonders. :) It gives it a very song-like quality. For whatever reason this piece makes me think of 'Beauty and the Beast', but my head's never really been screwed on right. :P
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tollykit Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2012  Professional Photographer
Beautiful poem.
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HollyBear007 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
i always say "every rose has its thorns."
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lmaohey Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is TOO amazing
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C00kieMuncher Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Sad but so sweet,too.
I love it.
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Peipei22 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Very beautiful poem :3
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EllOhVeeEe Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this really speaks to me...
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TheDeathOfAlibi Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Professional Writer
This as such a great meter and flow to it. Your choice of words really hits home on a lot of level as well. People are right, you need to get this in an anthology. Or, if you have more pieces, a full on collection. This is just a beautiful piece full of life and character. It tells a story only someone who truly feels can create. Pure beauty with no pliant guise.

- Tristan Cody.
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NykiiLynn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this should be called My Dear :)i like this a lot though.
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bitteryetsweet Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Nice, very nice.
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dragonsorcerer284 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012
This should go into some sort of poem anthology. More people need to read this. It's beautiful.
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Phantasm1 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Poor rose, I feel I should comfort her (and then remember she isn't real) which I suppose means you did a good job.
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The poor rose... :tears:
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sweetmarly Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Go to you tube and see the Helen Reddy version...that's the one I remember....sad.
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sweetmarly Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
A song comes to mind that is way before your time..."Delta Dawn what's that flower you have on...is it a faded rose from days gone by....."

Your poem reminds me of it....I like it.
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